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Itís been a long time
So I guess I was unprepared
When you took my heart by storm
Ran your fingers through my hair
Told me that you loved me
And never would let me go
And I wonder if I can trust you
Though my heart tells me so

As I sit here waiting for you
I wonder if it is true
Or if Iím only dreaming
And in the morning itíll be through

Please tell me Iím not sleeping
And that youíre really here
Tell me again you love me
And there is nothing to fear
Cause my little pessimistic heart
Tells me this cant be
And that youíre only a part of a dream
That in the morning you wont be
Lying here beside me
Holding me again
Tell me that you love me
Because I love you my friend
This is something I wrote while trying to write a short story for a writing class. It's just some of my feelings and how they sort of jumped onto the paper. If you're looking for realy good writing, I dont think this is it.
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darkfaerie33 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2003
this is a great peice! i feel like this a lot- like wondering if their love is real n stuff- great job!!! :D
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Melanophrionsa Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2003  Hobbyist Photographer
Hm... Love is such a thing to try to understand, no matter how deep into it you go, your always too shallow to bridge the gap, and too far out to reach back to the reason that comes with dry land...
So many doubts and fears, and poetry seems to be an effective way to relax thoes doubts and fears... (HintHint-Da-wont-let-me-submit-poems-fo r-some-reason-no-wonder-im-such-a-wreck. )
Your poem expresses thoes fears and doubts perfectly... (aka its good-)
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BOOSHNOODLE Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2003
.........*sigh*....i sooo remember feeling like that....on a couple of different occasions..


this piece is so good..write more and hurry. :)
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tiger-queen Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2003
ah that is so gud. it's raw emotion. :)
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Chains Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2003
I think you might be a little harsh on this poem. It says what you want it to clearly and with emotion.
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kylere Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2003
Ahh the doubts of being loved. Nice simple clear clean way of expressing them
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Panther-Nora Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2003
Yay!
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Ramuel Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2003
Dont worry, I love you.
Yay...?
:explosion:
-ramuel
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