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This song was written from the flat of my back.
It was the only place I could be
Life hit me so hard, left my soul a broken shard.
So I wrote this song from the flat… of my back.

This song was written from the flat of my back.
Dark was all I wanted to see.
Heard you were dead, the sorrow went to my head.
So I wrote this song from the flat… of my back.

This song was written from the flat of my back.
Wars and armies took you from me.
My love I give, without you I don’t want to live.
So I wrote this song from the flat… of my back.

This song was written from the flat of my back.
It’s where I wanted to be.
I’ll make no more war, lay down in peace forever more.
So I wrote this song from the flat… of my back.
I wrote this song from the flat… of my back.
I got an idea for something last night, and as I was writing this morning it sort of changed itself from a love song into... well... this.
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EmeraldWolf Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2004  Hobbyist Writer
I'am very intrigued, you sound like my double almost. Read some more of my poems on my page and find out why I say this.
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Panther-Nora Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2004
Cool. will do.
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EmeraldWolf Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2004  Hobbyist Writer
I forgot to ad my famous tag line to all who I elect as Deviantwatches.

The wolf is watching.
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Panther-Nora Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2004
lol,
The Panther is aware.
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EmeraldWolf Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2004  Hobbyist Writer
Sweet....lol
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SittingDistance Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2004   Writer
Interesting! The ellipsi (sic) throw me off a bit, I'll admit, but that's probably due to your trying to transcribe lyrics from music, yes?

I had to think a while about why you would write from the flat of your back. What I've come up with is that you yourself are flat on your back for poetic purposes; it brings me ideas of giving in and letting go, of defeat and maybe tragedy.

Powerful refrain, by all means.
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SittingDistance Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2004   Writer
You're very welcome. Ask me to read it again tomorrow, and I'd probably tell you something completely different ;)
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Panther-Nora Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2004
Good analysis, thank you for your introspective comment.
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Melanophrionsa Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2004  Hobbyist General Artist
I like that V much--- Good poem--- Still-- somehow seems v depressive...

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My internal bleeding is over!!!

I am so happy!
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Panther-Nora Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2004
Yeah, people who hear me sing it say the same thing. I didnt mean it to be, but I guess that's just how it came out.
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SecretAgent-loverman Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2004   Photographer
I like how it's a possible song but tells a story with ease as well. Wonderful.
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Panther-Nora Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2004
Thanks
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Kriasai Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2004
Oddly cool. I like!
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Panther-Nora Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2004
Yeah, I dont think I've ever written something like this before. Thanks for commenting.
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