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Who would I be?
I would be a woman of the earth.
Planting seeds, nurturing life;
I would sense the warmth in seedlings
Feel the blood of trees cool against my cheek
So close beneath their skin.

What would I be?
I would be a woman of the earth.
Feeling natureís love,
I would radiate that love to others.
Feeling the pull of the moon on the oceans,
Sense a stirring in my own blood.
And in summers heat and in winterís cold
Rest in the peace of all ages combined.

What would I be?
I would be a woman of the earth.
My roots firmly fixed in the soil,
Weathering out storms
I would feel the great pounding heart of the earth herself
Protecting me.

Who would I be?
I would be a woman of the earth.
With dirt under my nails,
And sunburn on my back,
I would earn my bread
By the sweat of my brow
In joy
To the end of my days.
This is something I've been throwing around my head for about a week, only I just now sat down to write it.
There is room for lots of improvement I know, so please tell me what you think.
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tiger-queen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2004
nice writing! it's a great poem :D
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Panther-Nora Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2004
thanks
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TeArFrOMaHeARtLesSSo Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2004   Writer
Thast kewl....Bravo!!
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TeArFrOMaHeARtLesSSo Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2004   Writer
Pleasure ^_^ for such a talented, sexy lady!
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Panther-Nora Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2004
thank you James!
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Kriasai Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2004
Love the imagery, in this.
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Panther-Nora Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2004
Thanks, I was trying to make my poetry more image oriented because so much of my poetry is completely statement.

*has spent too much time in writing class*
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s0346814 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2004
Love the imagery, and the repetition gives it a good flowing rythm. I cant see how it could be improved, but then im no expert at this! Click on my name above and maybe you could give me some tips!!
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Panther-Nora Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2004
Thanks for the comment. I didnt realize it had any rhythm at all until I read it out loud.
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