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I know these four walls
I built them.

I know these four walls
Know these ancient blood stains
The blood was mine.

I know these four walls
Know the smooth parts
Washed by a thousand tears
The tears were mine.

I know these four walls.

I know these four walls
Know the false comfort
Know the deceptive peace
Once found inside.

I know these four walls
Know the pain they lock inside
The pain they breed.

I know these four walls
I built them.

Set me free.
:iconpanther-nora:
I just sat down and wrote this. At the moment I like it, but I may not in the morning and it may be deleted soon.
It pretty much says how I feel right now.
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:iconsammy-jo:
~Sammy-Jo Nov 30, 2004   Writer
Great :clap:
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:iconmissy-star:
Lovely repitition, and the way it ends - 'set me free'.
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:iconpanther-nora:
That's just how it felt at the moment.
Thank you.
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:icondarknesscyshadow:
I used to have a room just like that...

I fell into it shortly after my life was destroyed by loss.... I thought there was no way out- But there was--- I got out-and since then life has improved for me.

Its a great poem---I've always said that great poems make the reader think- and it made me think quite a bit.
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:iconpanther-nora:
I'm glad it made you think. Thank you.
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:iconkriasai:
Jeesh, I am in such awe of you!
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:iconpanther-nora:
Thanks Liz.
*blushes* I didnt think it was THAT good.
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:iconkyaku:
hello
great job--a lot of depth, such depth of feelings is usually lost when articulated but you pulled through
awesome.

p.s. i figure if you created the walls, you are the only one who can set yourself free, as cliche as it sounds :giggle:

L8R
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